This picture sort of sets the scene. This is from the follow up to my novel Light Bringer, tentatively called Venators. Ryan kissed Kalie once last summer and they haven’t really spoken since. It’s Christmas night at Ryan’s family’s home, and the couple are in the gazebo talking.
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Kalie broke eye contact and said, “You kissed me, Ryan, and then apologized for it. You kissed me and said you’d never do it again. How’s that supposed to make me feel? What’s so terrible about kissing me that you’d never want to do it again?”
Ryan gaped at her, watched her hazel eyes mist over and he finally understood. “Kal, I wasn’t apologizing for kissing you, but for how it happened. That I just pounced, forced myself on you.” He stepped closer. “I never meant to make you think that I didn’t want to…kissing you was like…I just…” His emotions took over and he slammed his mouth to hers.
Their teeth clanked, their noses bumped and Ryan thought he bit her. It was a terrible kiss, the worst he’d ever had.
He pulled back. “Sor—”
“Don’t apologize or I swear I’ll punch you.” Kalie sucked her bottom lip into her mouth, and he hoped it wasn’t to nurse a bite.
“Okay, I won’t ever apologize to you again.”
Holding back a smirk at her eye roll, Ryan licked his lips and closed the distance between them. His lips met hers in a much more civilized manner. He tasted her slowly, nibbling tenderly. Kalie’s hands moved up to his shoulders and around his neck. Ryan pulled her snuggly against him, deepening the kiss.
Hints of apple cider coated her tongue and he remembered the first time he’d kissed her she'd tasted like mango. Would she always taste like something sweet? His hands began to roam as they stumbled back against the railing. Swirling his tongue deeper into her mouth, he tried to learn as much as he could about how she liked to be kissed. But his brain rattled around in his head like a lone marble. He was kissing Kalie, again. And she wanted it. Awesome! Ryan didn’t care that snow was wetting his hair or that he was freezing. Nor did he care that he was kissing and groping Kalie in full view of anyone who may happen upon the kitchen window.
37 comments:
Okay, reading all these kissing scenes on everybody's blogs is making me a little...well, guess it's time to stop blogging and go find my husband!
ooooo steamy!!! I love how it's not perfect at first and then he tries again!!! *swoon*
LOL! I'm glad I'm not the only one needing the hubby right now. Apple cider, nice! Yummy. I loved it!
Kissing Day is officially my favorite holiday :D Love, LOVE your post!
I love the awkwardness in the beginning! It's so perfectly done! Thanks for sharing!
awwwww! I love how it went from horribly awkward to sweet, with enough banter between them to show closeness and intimacy! Ryan seemed sweet--though I'm partial to Ryan's---he's the hero in my WIP.
Nice! You really captured the reality of a teenage kiss. It's rarely like the movies (on the first try, anyway.)
P.S. I love your blog title. :)
LOL, I can imagine Ryan's sisters watching out the window!
Great scene!
ooh i like the nibbling...and i thought it was pretty great that the first kiss was awkward but then the second one was more intense
I love that they bumped teeth first! This felt like a real kiss. Excellent scene.
I agree - the first kiss was a great set-up for the next. And your writing really went along with the kisses...shorter, staccato sentences for the first, longer, more flowing prose for the second. It really enhanced the whole scene. Great job! :-)
Okay, laughing hard! Teeth clanked, he may have bit her! You're too funny. I just love them. And then she tasted sweet. Aww. Thanks for sharing, Karen. Super job.
I love Ryan's imperfections. It makes him seem so real. Lovely scene. Thanks for sharing!
I love the apple cider touch & the following comment - makes it very real :)
The dawning awareness is beautifully portrayed. Thanks for sharing. Isn't this Blogfest great?
You captured the moment perfectly! Nice job:)
Awww...I LOVE how they got it right the second time around. :)
You write humor well, which is extremely difficult for me, so kudos on the teeth-hitting, nose-bumping playfulness!
where's the ice water? need some. :)
jeannie
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So real and believable, yet great passion. Love it! And now I'm hoping it snows down here in Fl and I end up in a gazebo with a hot guy. ;) Odds are slim to none. lol
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"He tried to learn as much as he could about how she liked to be kissed..." Smart man!
This whole scene just made me smile. Third time's the charm, yeah?
I loved that the first kiss was terrible but he wasn't afraid to try again, and that he didn't care who saw them. :-)
Fantastic halting dialogue! Very believable and ditto to what C R Ward posted above!
lol, i love that they have an awkward kiss at first. We all know that in real life, that so happens sometimes. :)
The stuff of dreams. Your piece was beautifully written and I ENJOYED reading.
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I loved the awkwardness and the passion. It had a great YA feel to it.
3 things:
I love the picture. Perfect match for the scene.
I love the first awkward kiss because it's SO real.
I love that he didn't care who saw him groping her because when you're in that moment, nothing and no one else exists.
Awesome!
Not only was this beatifully written, but it was also very authentic. It reminded me of my first kiss with my hubby over six years ago. Awesome job!
I love how he bumped her teeth then tried again. Very sweet! And very real. LOL
Whew! Very long-lost-love angst. This is awesome!
I loved it!
Jenni James
I love steamy with a hint of chivalry! :)
I loved your excerpt! Loved the characters, tastes, sounds, feelings. Can't wait to read more. Sigh.
Loved the kiss! With all the blogs about kissing I'm reading this morning (and might I add I'm getting no writing done at all), my husband isn't going to know what hit him when he gets out of bed. :D
Okay, here's the link to my kiss. Well not my kiss, but the one from my novel.
Ooooo-la-la, girl! You rocked it! I loved "would she always taste so sweet"...sigh...very nicely done! Thanks so much for joining in the fun and making the kissing party such a success! (sorry it took me so long to get to yours...I had good intentions. :)
Practice makes perfect they say! That kiss was worth a redo it seems. And you didn't disappoint with making it steamy!
I'm glad I'm not the only one needing the hubby right now. Apple cider, nice! Yummy. I loved it!
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Thanks Kanishk...sadly, I don't have a hubby to test out these scenes on. :-(
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